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More To Feel

Posted: Fri Mar 06, 2009 6:30 am
by sprinks41
this is about one of my good friends. she lost her virginity a little too early in her teen years, and i wrote this song describing how it's affected her in different ways. please do not ask me how old she was because i will not give that away. also, i personally am a little disappointed at how this song turned out because i usually write better than this, but i felt like posting it anyway lol.

Verse 1
Regardless and stupid, you never refused
Some say you were young, I say you were used
It was poor judgment, you were naive
People would say things and you would believe
Now you're hooked so you constantly crave
No matter what happens you better be safe
I can't stop you, even if I could
You wouldn't listen, even though you should

Chorus
If you could do things over
Would you wait until you're older
There's more to feel than just pleasure
It's not the same when you're under pressure

Verse 2
I am not calling you a whore
But I will not sit back and ignore
How you see it as a priority
Maybe it's something inside me
No flaws are seen through your vision
As the result of a blinding addiction
You scare me when you don't act smart
Wish you wouldn't gamble with your own heart

(Chorus)

Bridge
Don't reason with facts, you're out of line
Just do your thing and I'll do mine
Bad examples taken the wrong way
It's not what you think no matter what you say
You can't be feeling, what others are stealing
when it's taken so wrong
Now you can see, the way it should be
is where you belong

(Chorus)

Re: More To Feel

Posted: Fri Mar 06, 2009 6:44 am
by Kelbunk
I like the song, i think you did really good at describing the situation you were writing about

Re: More To Feel

Posted: Fri Mar 06, 2009 8:17 pm
by sprinks41
Kelbunk wrote:I like the song, i think you did really good at describing the situation you were writing about
thanks :smile:

Re: More To Feel

Posted: Sat Mar 07, 2009 1:37 am
by turtlehobopirate
Very nice song! I think you should add chords to it and make it into an actual song. And perform it! It's also awesome how you give just enough info to the reader, but you don't give everything away and that you don't make it too obvious. You're really good at writing songs!

Re: More To Feel

Posted: Sat Mar 07, 2009 2:03 am
by sprinks41
turtlehobopirate wrote:It's also awesome how you give just enough info to the reader, but you don't give everything away and that you don't make it too obvious. You're really good at writing songs!
thank you very much :smile:

Re: More To Feel

Posted: Sun Mar 08, 2009 1:00 am
by Hentaiman
Good song. well done :D

Re: More To Feel

Posted: Sun Mar 08, 2009 10:05 pm
by sprinks41
Hentaiman wrote:Good song. well done :D
thank you Hentaiman :smile:

Re: More To Feel

Posted: Wed Mar 11, 2009 8:06 am
by J-Pan
Woah, really good, you describe the song just as you wrote in your description in a way so its original and not to basic. Good job

Re: More To Feel

Posted: Sun Mar 15, 2009 7:47 am
by sprinks41
thank you :smile:

Re: More To Feel

Posted: Fri Mar 20, 2009 10:03 pm
by PunkSteve
its good, but it just needs another hook line in one of the verses, but deffo.. a good situation explanation! :D