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cheesy pickup line - original song

Posted: Thu Mar 05, 2009 2:35 am
by Heather
I know the bridge chords needs some work, I just threw it together real quick

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-A2r5ZJ9WC0
Lyrics ( I kinda messed up a few of them in the video )
you look in the mirror to make sure your hair is jsut right
and blow a kiss to every girl that passes you by
you're all they think about
thats something I'll never figure out

Cause they're to blind to see, that you're just a prom king
you try so hard to get me, but you keep on forgetting
that I'm not impressed, and you're out of luck
look how good you are at getting her
too bad she's not the one your running after

you've asked me out at least a thousand times
don't worry there's plenty of girls waiting in line
I've thrown away all your flowers
So stop calling me every freakin half hour

Cause you think you're every girls wildest dream
you try so hard to get me, but keep on forgetting
that I'm not impressed, and you're out of luck
thinking I'll come around for sure
too bad that you're not the one I'm looking for

So go ahead and tell all your friends
that you've got me, just where you want me
and you'll have me in no time
just have to lay down one more cheesy line

Now you're starting to split at the seems
you tried to hard to get me, and kept on forgetting
that I'm not impressed and you're out of luck
please don't try anymore
too bad I have found the one I'm looking for

Re: cheesy pickup line - original song

Posted: Thu Mar 05, 2009 2:45 am
by Jeremy Kill
Fixed it for ya!

I liked the song, it's got a catchy melody. Though it made me sad as I remembered all the times I've bombed. D=D

Re: cheesy pickup line - original song

Posted: Thu Mar 05, 2009 2:49 am
by Shiv
Jeremy wrote:Fixed it for ya!

I liked the song, it's got a catchy melody. Though it made me sad as I remembered all the times I've bombed. D=D
:agreed:

i like it :happy:

invest in a microphone!!!!!
and record them seperately!!!!

other than that great :glad:

Re: cheesy pickup line - original song

Posted: Thu Mar 05, 2009 2:53 am
by rockindrummer41
Shiv wrote:
Jeremy wrote:Fixed it for ya!

I liked the song, it's got a catchy melody. Though it made me sad as I remembered all the times I've bombed. D=D
:agreed:

i like it :happy:

invest in a microphone!!!!!
and record them seperately!!!!

other than that great :glad:
:agreed:

Re: cheesy pickup line - original song

Posted: Thu Mar 05, 2009 3:32 am
by ReemFTW
I love it! The melody is really nice, and I really like your voice in this song =]
Great Job!

Re: cheesy pickup line - original song

Posted: Thu Mar 05, 2009 4:48 am
by Kelbunk
i really like this song
youre pretty deadly

Re: cheesy pickup line - original song

Posted: Thu Mar 05, 2009 5:37 am
by Hentaiman
Its pretty damn awesome! :grin:
I liked the lyrics and the vocal melody overall, fitted very nice with the music.

Re: cheesy pickup line - original song

Posted: Thu Mar 05, 2009 6:37 am
by turtlehobopirate
Awesome song! I think it should flow a little better, like how you stop between each half line, you should make those pauses shorter. Amazing lyrics though.

Re: cheesy pickup line - original song

Posted: Thu Mar 05, 2009 7:56 pm
by Heather
thanks for fixing it up Jeremy

and thanks for all the comments, I really appreciate it. I have a cheap microphone but need to invest in a recording software of some sort. I did free trial for like a week but that was years ago.

thanks again guys and gals

Re: cheesy pickup line - original song

Posted: Thu Mar 05, 2009 8:59 pm
by CIRCUITzach
nice.
heres a easy pick up line
Man : Hi i am not a rangers fan, i dont like sucky players like brandon dubinsky and i like good music like 311
women. lets do it.

Re: cheesy pickup line - original song

Posted: Thu Mar 05, 2009 11:25 pm
by Shiv
CIRCUITzach wrote:nice.
heres a easy pick up line
Man : Hi i am not a rangers fan, i dont like sucky players like brandon dubinsky and i like good music like 311
women. lets do it.
is the woman really zach in disguise???
probably cuz hes gay