Hell

[LTS]

this is basically a song that quickly turned into a poem; that quickly turned into an all out mess. I implore you to make any sense out of it; i wrote it when i was very upset and to this day have no clue what it means.. i basically took the poem structure and tried to find as many dynamic rhymes as i could think of...

so i apologize in advance if it sounds like complete shit.




Hell, You see...
you can't have something perfect without a fuck up like me.
in this place, we're all 1 people, all one race, and we're racing...
to the end of the tunnel, it's like a funnel, cloud, sucks up all the shit becuase you
can't have trash without treasure, can't have lines without the edge, of a ruler, the
ruler sets the rules, that we break, in this shithole.. we take, everything we find,
until we all loose mind, of peace, What's war? Hope for it while praying for more &
say somthing nice, can't figure out, roll the dice, pass go, but dont go pick up 200,
that's my dough, you'll see, in this society, you claim anything, you're me. i'm you.
now fuck: individuality, we need something new. Clones, roboting the future, the past
it holds; many mistakes to be made just 99 words to go. Everything is structured,
tucked shirt, Fucked? hurt? i don't care, it's not my life, running reason left
tonight, the future holds; what's not for sale, digging up for oil; shale; all our
resources: gone well i'm sorry? Napalm? solution? like many of those mynamers, like
dynosaurs, tyrant or tyrananosuras rex, just like sex, some people want; but it's
still there to haunt. Fears with the devil, relax, sit back. Six-packs. Wanna Beer? not here.
not ever, very clever; broken smiles,a hundred miles, but there's only one thing i can tell...

we're all in hell.

[Dylan]

sounds like a rapped-verse from a song by Mike Shinoda. i like it.

[iemnaiz]

six-packs? hahahahahhahahah. very creative :p

[SociallyInept]

sounds like a rapped-verse from a song by Mike Shinoda. i like it.

Agreed, it sounds really cool dude.

[LTS]

it's still not finished; but i'm gonna maybe finish it later today; i'll edit my post accordingly;

and thanks for the feedback.. i still think it sounds like a mess of words thrown together...


EDIT: i've finished it now.. check it out..