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New song I wrote

Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 6:30 am
by erikj9
I haven't made a title yet, I think it's a pretty cool song.

Verse 1:
Why can't we look at the past?
How come it would never last?
But you were the one
And then it was done.
And if i could change back time,
Life be like that you were mine.
But life is just not fair.
But like you would ever care.

Chorus:
But I am just so scared.
I don't wanna lose you,
And if I do,
I would never choose to.

Verse 2:
And if the stars did dance,
You'd give me one more chance,
But that's not the case,
I'd kill myself to see your face.
And if I could kiss you,
I would never lose you.
I would crawl to my room,
and think of love at the moon

[Chorus]

Bridge:
You were never cute.
You were fucking beautiful. x4

[Chorus x2]

Re: New song I wrote

Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 1:37 pm
by HilgaMan
^ Good post!

I think the song is decent. I like the chorus very much.

Re: New song I wrote

Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 9:23 pm
by Peterr
Acoustic Bandit (wiggs1441) wrote:ok
one word posts...... :roll:
I really like the chorus. I can connect to it and that makes it special. :wink:

Re: New song I wrote

Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 9:56 pm
by tomhoppus
nice


:lol!: :smug:

I like it

Re: New song I wrote

Posted: Sun Jul 13, 2008 11:18 am
by Hentaiman
nice one. nice chorus indeed.

Re: New song I wrote

Posted: Tue Jul 22, 2008 12:53 pm
by c4rlsson
Looks pretty nice :D I like what I see :).

Re: New song I wrote

Posted: Tue Jul 22, 2008 3:48 pm
by withchappedlips
I really like the bridge, and almost wanted to steal the lines cuz I really liked them.

I think the chorus could be a bit longer, especially with that format, but overall it's a good piece of writing.

Re: New song I wrote

Posted: Tue Jul 29, 2008 10:18 pm
by the perfect li e
I like it! :smile:
there are some parts I like alot, and some parts that don't make alot of sence.
Nevertheless good song!