The Judgement of Man [a song i wrote]

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The Judgement of Man [a song i wrote]

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A Song i wrote about our fucked out blind society. called The Judgement of Man.

Feel free to tell me what do you think. the third verse is kinda a work in progress. I had some cool melody in mind for it when i wrote it, but i forgot it now so it seems kinda outta place now :oops: Unless i'll find that good melody i had for it again :D

[verse 1]
Can you see it?
I know you can
Even though i try to live
They send me to the den
They don't know who I am
And my true story
They only judge... and kill
Never even sorry

[chorus]
The judgement of man
Wasn't the only thing they did wrong
The judgement of man
If we could fix this broken world
The judgment of man
No one can rewrite their song
And were... drowning in their world!

[verse 2]
Fear creeps into my bed
I don't know what to think
They'll judge you by your looks
That's why i sink
Each time you make a mistake
It stains your fuckin' name
Seems like with every step you take
You just feel more lame!

[chorus]
[interlude]

[verse 3]
I never tried myself to fit into this
Brain-sick society
Why would i need this?!
Gave me this stupid test
They don't know me!
Only judging eyes
Looking at me...
But I, I should've known better!

[chorus]
[interlude 2 + guitar solo]

[chorus x3]

Drowning in their world! [x4]
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that was very, very awesome!!! really good job.
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Gibsum 41 wrote:that was very, very awesome!!! really good job.
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Thanx for the comments guys :D
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