For Better Or Worse

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Dan
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For Better Or Worse

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A song about meeting women.
Constructive criticism please.
As usual, I have a vocal meoldy which works, so please, no comments about it not fitting...

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Hey there, pretty young sweetheart
I dont wanna be alone
Dont you tell me that you love me
and your far from home, oh

Hey there, lady of the darkness
Why do you abuse me so?
I was fine before i met you
now i want to go, oh

You say we dont know
I dont belive it
Drink down that Pernod
Jump in the mosh pit
Dance like a madman
Your so perverse
I had a good plan
for better or worse

Hey there, stranger from a strange land
Why did you ever have to leave?
You ran away from all your problems
What did you achieve, oh

You say we dont know
I dont belive it
Drink down that Pernod
Jump in the mosh pit
Dance like a madman
Your so perverse
I had a good plan
for better or worse

Hey there, whisper on a warm breeze
Your secrets, tell them all to me
With fear setting in my head
its time to set you free, oh

You say we dont know
I dont belive it
Drink down that Pernod
Jump in the mosh pit
Dance like a madman
Your so perverse
I had a good plan
for better or worse
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Post by wiggs1441 »

great song but i got confused in the middle.
tomhoppus is my Master!
NoReason27 is my Grand-master!
BrandonCorey is my N00B!
Sum-42 is my Grand N00B!

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really liked it but like wiggs said it kinda starts falling apart in the middle. also i think its more like being with a bitch
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Gibsum 41 wrote:really liked it but like wiggs said it kinda starts falling apart in the middle. also i think its more like being with a bitch
good point. its kinda like being with a bitch now that i think about it
tomhoppus is my Master!
NoReason27 is my Grand-master!
BrandonCorey is my N00B!
Sum-42 is my Grand N00B!

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