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Zam · Post by **Zam** » Fri Aug 03, 2007 10:03 pm

I said I would die for you,
And look, and wait, and sing for you.
The melody that used to bring such joy
Now stings my eyes with tears of grief.
I still remember our first dance,
First time I had ever danced.
Danced to prove my love for you
And to prove nothing else mattered.

Now, nothing matters [CouldnÃ¢â‚¬â„¢t care less]
About what happened. [Next it in this story]
You swore you loved me. [Just empty words]
IÃ¢â‚¬â„¢m sick and tired and gonna end all this.

You used me like a marionette,
With empty words, words of hate.
Grab a knife, stab my back,
I bet even thatÃ¢â‚¬â„¢d hurt less.

When I start to think we get somewhere
WeÃ¢â‚¬â„¢re back to the very beginning.
Do we really have to repeat all of this
The lies, the hate, the tears, the blood?
Please write Ã¢â‚¬Å“loveÃ¢â‚¬Â on my arm
Using a dagger and pressing it hard
Onto my delicate, smooth skin
Cutting it open, making me bleed.

Shall we repeat this [Even knowing the answers]
And keep me suffering? [You know you want this]
CanÃ¢â‚¬â„¢t feel it now [pain is non-existent]
Please stop destroying me.

You used me like a marionette,
With empty words, words of hate.
Grab a knife, stab my back,
I bet even thatÃ¢â‚¬â„¢d hurt less.

The parts that are between [ ], I'm gonna scream 'em.

Most emo song I've written... I think. Also the one with the most meaning in it. I'm between a love, hate situation with my ex / best friend. One day she tells me she loves me, the next she says she doesn't...

Constructive criticism, please.

Jon Nolan · Post by **Jon Nolan** » Sat Aug 04, 2007 1:00 am

No comment 8)

Zam · Post by **Zam** » Sat Aug 04, 2007 1:15 am

:D :D :D :D <3 <3 <3 <3

JESSter · Post by **JESSter** » Wed Aug 08, 2007 10:27 pm

i like it. i can really hear it in my head. it sounds like a really emotional song, and i love the screamin parts.

and i can really live this song. ive been on that situation...

Arcane · Post by **Arcane** » Wed Aug 08, 2007 11:37 pm

zam i love your lyrics!
if i hadn't had known where i had read them i could have sworn it was a real song.
i truly dont have much negative to say, as a song it would work well with any slow-medium paced song, but if your thinking of screaming i'd stick to that anyway; adds a nice effect

with the [] brackets are you gonna add a reverb? is this a solo effort or for your band? coz the band could reverb those parts or maybe some other lyrics that fit between it?

all just ideas coz i dont have much else to say

oooh also you might want to add some enthusiastic words here and there, the words that mean more or relate more to the song or maybe something emotive, to perhaps sing with more volume or a higher enthasis, gives the impression of your hurt and anger and could really bring a nice effect to it

anyway your choice, but this is great work =]

Zam · Post by **Zam** » Thu Aug 09, 2007 12:20 am

Thanks, both of you! It is a band song, but usually me and my bassist write the lyrics. I'll definitely try to add the reverb to the song.

I don't know if I'll be changing some lyrics cuz I meant this song to be a little depressing, I want to give a chance to people to know how I feel and I usually do it through my lyrics. Writing notes/lyrics/poems/random lines is a way of therapy and expressing myself. I'm really glad you liked them. Thank you, once again.

EDIT: By the way, Swish, thanks for the compliment. :)
It's the first time anyone says my lyrics sound pro. I just try to create my own style while I feel some people try to use other people's styles. So, thanks, I'll try hard. :)

Arcane · Post by **Arcane** » Thu Aug 09, 2007 12:38 am

the best thing really zam.
its gotta be from the heart or the lyrics just wont work. in a way having a hard situation can be terrible but having the right creative outlet like you've done can really make something of yourself. been in the situation a few times myself. i end up drawing something though to channel my emotions :)
really though this is excellent stuff, i really hope it goes well

Zam · Post by **Zam** » Thu Aug 09, 2007 12:55 am

Thanks! :D

Jon Nolan · Post by **Jon Nolan** » Thu Aug 09, 2007 3:22 pm

Your gonna record this?

Zam · Post by **Zam** » Thu Aug 09, 2007 3:27 pm

Probably. Usually we get loads of lyrics and then decide the best few out of em and make em songs. I'll try. :)

Jon Nolan · Post by **Jon Nolan** » Thu Aug 09, 2007 3:35 pm

Cool, i wanna hear it if you do. :)

Arcane · Post by **Arcane** » Thu Aug 09, 2007 3:44 pm

me too =]

Zam · Post by **Zam** » Thu Aug 09, 2007 4:12 pm

Kk. :)

Jon Nolan · Post by **Jon Nolan** » Thu Aug 09, 2007 4:39 pm

Coolio. *waits*

JESSter · Post by **JESSter** » Thu Aug 09, 2007 10:07 pm

i wanna hear it too!

Zam · Post by **Zam** » Thu Aug 09, 2007 10:21 pm

Too... Much... Attention... Can't ... Handle...

But I love it. :D

Arcane · Post by **Arcane** » Thu Aug 09, 2007 11:58 pm

lol we crave your bum.... i mean music

Zam · Post by **Zam** » Fri Aug 10, 2007 12:23 am

Fuck me in da bum.

Arcane · Post by **Arcane** » Fri Aug 10, 2007 12:53 am

lool next time i go to.... wait you from america? im from england. we can organise bumfun if you live over here ;)
lmao

Zam · Post by **Zam** » Fri Aug 10, 2007 1:01 am

Central America. Haha. No. Cyber secks ftw. ;)