The Beach (yeah i know it's an ATL song title oh well)

[pakiraider]

Can I call you up tonight?
Pick you up take you with me on this flight
Another late night rendezvous
Just you and I

Lay on sandy beaches
Watch the sun rise
Cause tonight’s the only night we have
Before it goes out
Don’t you fall asleep on me
Come morning I’m gone

So what you waiting for?
Get in the car and let’s go
Whoah!
To the beach here we go, here we go
Here we go again

Let’s just walk it
Bare feet on the sand
And I can’t, I can’t, I can’t lie
Don’t want this night to end
Don’t wanna let go, let go of you just yet

So don’t you forget
We got nine hours till sunrise
To do whatever the hell we want
Just two idiots acting like fools

Doesn’t matter what other people say
Fuck ‘em cause it’s one night summer romance
Don’t be afraid, just grab my hand and let’s dance
Cause tonight’s our only chance to act careless
And start a tangled mess

Take me up on my bets
“Double or nothing” or forget it
All, all, all the way is how I see it
It’s a careless getaway

Let’s just walk the beach
Bare feet on the sand
And I can’t, I can’t, I can’t lie
Don’t want this night to end
Don’t wanna let go, let go of you just yet

So don’t you forget
We got nine hours till sunrise
To do whatever the hell we want
Just two idiots acting like fools

Pick you up soon
Cause I wanna see your eyes glow like the moon
Till the sun rises we’ll fight it
A one night summer romance
One night so don’t fall asleep
Cause the price you’ll pay will be steep

Me and you –ou-you
Just two idiots with one night to get it right
Till the sun rises won’t let you outta my sight
Cause it’s our one and only night
So don’t you fall asleep

[pakiraider]

nobody wants to comment, yall leaving me broken hearted LOLL

[withchappedlips]

nobody wants to comment, yall leaving me broken hearted LOLL

What comments are you looking for? Do you want me to lie to you and say "OMG I LOVED IT!!!" ?

People on this forum don't give constructed criticism. They tell you "oh yeah it's good" without even fucking reading your lyrics. Congrats, you can write out a song length of lyrics. Now, do yourself a favor and write a guitar chord, record it, and come back here with a song completed. Instead of filling up the lyrics section with lyrics nobody cares about, why don't you actually try to do something with these lyrics that you're writing?

How many of your songs actually get legit criticism, or legit useful comments? I've been going up and down the front page attempting to locate real posts that could help your songs in any way. No, there are none. All I see are people saying "aw it'z sew gud! i liek it!" Yeah, I'll fucking post a song about my love for toenails, and I'm sure they'll post the same damn shit in my thread too. The only thing you benefit from these comments is your e-peen rising because somebody actually maybe cared enough to read one of your songs. Congrats.

Seriously, post in other sections of this forum. This section is dead.

[Emil]

This may have been the best post in this section ever. Says alot i think.

[Jables]

**Awkward turtle agrees with the above, then shuffles away**

[pakiraider]

ok w/e i won't post what i write that's cool

[Jables]

ok w/e i won't post what i write that's cool

I think the general vibe of this thread is that you should post what you create, just with music attatched to it, we don't want to just be faced with endless lyrics
Constructive^^