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Dead To Me

Posted: Thu Mar 24, 2011 4:32 am
by sprinks41
a friend of mine was unfortunately betrayed and backstabbed by a good friend of her's and reallyyy upset by the whole situation. she told me she was so hurt, she'll never be able to forgive her friend for the betrayal. i wrote this from her perspective, and she said she loved it.

Verse 1
You had me believe that you'd always be there
How can you deceive me and just not care?
I opened myself up to you
And this is what I get in return
I can't wait 'til the same thing happens to you
I'm gonna smile watching you burn

Chorus
How could you?
You're as low as they come
After all we've been through
You're lower than scum
You betrayed me
You'll never get a second chance
You're dead to me
Good riddance

Verse 2
Nothing you say can change the way I feel
I could barely sleep at night the pain is so unreal
I'm over it now
But I'll never forgive or forget
The shit that you put me through
You're not even worth a regret

(Chorus)

Bridge
Enjoy it now 'cause it won't be long
'Til the fun is over and you have to move on
The tables will turn and then you will see
The feeling of betrayal you inflicted in me

(Chorus)

Re: Dead To Me

Posted: Thu Mar 24, 2011 4:38 am
by Dylan
sprinks41 wrote:
Chorus
How could you?
You're as low as they come
After all we've been through
You're lower than scum
You betrayed me
You'll never get a second chance
You're dead to me
Good riddance
i find it's very hard to come up with "good" lyrics when dealing with a topic such as this. it always seems like there's too many pronouns. without hearing these chorus lyrics in that actual song, it's hard to think of what they'd sound like. unless you're happy with the lyrics, i would advise coming up with a better chorus.

Re: Dead To Me

Posted: Thu Mar 24, 2011 8:02 am
by lisaNL
Yeah I think it's pretty good but I agree about the chorus. Try to come up with something more meaningful instead of just bashing the dude who did it :)

Re: Dead To Me

Posted: Thu Mar 24, 2011 2:42 pm
by FuckT41182
I agree that the chorus is shitty, but cmon guys , bashing about someone works ! Green Day FOD - "You're such a fuck,I can't explain it cos I think u suck !"

Re: Dead To Me

Posted: Thu Mar 24, 2011 2:47 pm
by Bobbyjames
you need to scream "cunt" at least 20 times somewhere in the song.

Re: Dead To Me

Posted: Fri Mar 25, 2011 2:36 am
by sprinks41
Bobbyjames wrote:you need to scream "cunt" at least 20 times somewhere in the song.
hahahaha!!! :hehe:

Re: Dead To Me

Posted: Fri Dec 09, 2011 3:09 pm
by SickofEveryone
Yes, I agree with everyone about the chorus. :/