I wrote a song

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sumfan4
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I wrote a song

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These are my lyrics please nobody steal them. :happy:

This is the first song I've posted on TNS, but I have written alot. It's about a very weird dream I had last night. I dreamed that my best friend died and it was a very sad dream, and I thought he was really dead all day until I came back to reality, so I thought I'd put it on paper. Please give your honest input.

Last night you died
And now you've come back to life
I remember it, the funeral
Crying my eyes out just to find
That nothing is what it seems

These are just dreams

Pulling away from the silence
More than just black and white
I held on to you
As you died late last night

Where were you?
Sleeping away in a coffin
I was there too, right beside you
Somehow it seems real but I know you're still here

Pulling away from the silence
More than just black and white
I held onto you
As you died late last night
I could not save you
These hands you just slipped through
But I swear on my grave
I will not let go of you
(repeat whole chorus again)



It's kind of like a rough copy. Please tell me what ya'll think!
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I actually really enjoyed them! They were alot better than I thought they were going to be.
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Great lyrics ! :)
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Sounds like something Slipping Away-ish if you know what i mean :silly:

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Re: I wrote a song

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Thats pretty cool, well done
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Thanks guys for all the positive feedback!
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