I just listened to the song Don't Forget, I think it was pretty good all round, I enjoy this sort of music to calm me down occasionally instead of all the rock I listen to.
The only criticism I have is a few points closer to the end it sounds like you're running out of breath and the pitch wavers heaps, so I guess just work on breathing whenever possible
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Re: HLMmusic (new song "Don't Forget")
Thanks Tyler. I probably did run out of breath. I had sang it 3 times before that to practice and its a heavy strumming song that kinda wore me out...lol
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Re: HLMmusic (new song "Don't Forget")
I really love your new song, especially the lyrics! :)
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Thanks Lisa! Its inspired by my sister
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Re: HLMmusic (new song "Don't Forget")
EHDFCERUSDFJKHCRFDX. first one of yours I've heard in a while. but my God, I loved it. it's got to be one of my favorites by you to date.
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I really liked the new song! And like Lisa, I love the lyrics too.
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Thanks Sarah and Susanne! I really appreciate it!
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Re: HLMmusic (new song "Don't Forget")
That, now that is a nice song.
I like it a lot.
Keep up with what you are doing!
I like it a lot.
Keep up with what you are doing!
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Thanks!!!FakeNinja wrote:That, now that is a nice song.
I like it a lot.
Keep up with what you are doing!
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Re: HLMmusic (new song "Happily Scared")
May 22nd: New Song: "Happily Scared"
I've seen you lost and found
Lately it's the other way around
And I don't even know
What to say anymore
But maybe, there'll be a day
When maybe, there'll be a way
For you to come back to who you really are
Instead of being just happily scared, like you say
I've seen you douse your pain
In a bottle of who's to blame
And you don't even care
It's like you're not even there
So cut that rope you been holding on
It's been keeping you up way too long
And jump head first without blinking an eye
To be re-born you gotta learn how to die
I've seen you lost and found
Lately it's the other way around
And I don't even know
What to say anymore
But maybe, there'll be a day
When maybe, there'll be a way
For you to come back to who you really are
Instead of being just happily scared, like you say
I've seen you douse your pain
In a bottle of who's to blame
And you don't even care
It's like you're not even there
So cut that rope you been holding on
It's been keeping you up way too long
And jump head first without blinking an eye
To be re-born you gotta learn how to die
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Re: HLMmusic (new song "Happily Scared")
I really like verses! I felt like this one had a bit different vibe than your other stuff!
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I really like it! Defenitely one of my favorites by you.
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Re: HLMmusic (new song "Happily Scared")
Thanks Samuel! I'm beginning to think this was inspired lyrically by SBM some how, like Happiness Machines. dunno where the music came from, I was just playing around with strumming then started humming, then lyrics came. it went by really fast..lolsamueeL wrote:I really like verses! I felt like this one had a bit different vibe than your other stuff!
Thanks Lisa, yeah I think its one of my faves too, the ones that come quick always are.lisaNL wrote:I really like it! Defenitely one of my favorites by you.
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Re: HLMmusic (new song "Clean with a Carelessness")
new one. I have another too that I need to record, but I got caught up in this one today
You say I'm there, but need some help
What if I don't want the hand thats dealt
It's been so long, since I was sure
That every problem has an instant cure
I can't seem to get
I can't seem to bet
Just where I'm a going next
And all thats left, is a mess
That I clean with a carelessness
On my own, I say I'll be fine
Though I know those words are all lies
Falling down, with every turn
I often think I know more than I learn
I know I can't, go on like this
Not everything ends in hit or miss
I caffeine up, wind back down
I can't act like I got it all figure out
You say I'm there, but need some help
What if I don't want the hand thats dealt
It's been so long, since I was sure
That every problem has an instant cure
I can't seem to get
I can't seem to bet
Just where I'm a going next
And all thats left, is a mess
That I clean with a carelessness
On my own, I say I'll be fine
Though I know those words are all lies
Falling down, with every turn
I often think I know more than I learn
I know I can't, go on like this
Not everything ends in hit or miss
I caffeine up, wind back down
I can't act like I got it all figure out
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Love it. It's so... new! You reinvented wheel! Definitely influenced by Baby You Don't Wanna Know :D
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Re: HLMmusic (new song "Clean with a Carelessness")
Don't like it that much..
edit:
why i don't like it:
I don't like the guitar pattern.. it doesn't goes in too me as "yeah i really like this".. also the lyrics don't attract me..
but that's my opinion
edit:
why i don't like it:
I don't like the guitar pattern.. it doesn't goes in too me as "yeah i really like this".. also the lyrics don't attract me..
but that's my opinion
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Re: HLMmusic (new song "Clean with a Carelessness")
Thanks Samuel, it is different that anything I"ve done
Stef, thanks for your opinion, its ok if you don't like it, the lyrics are kinda where I'm at in my life right now. thanks for listening!
Stef, thanks for your opinion, its ok if you don't like it, the lyrics are kinda where I'm at in my life right now. thanks for listening!
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Re: HLMmusic (new song "Clean with a Carelessness")
okay, guess i gotta say this again.
i found your vocal melody a little too mono tone in a way. i think you have a great voice and instead of singing at the same volume or in the same note-area, really try to explore your voice. the song was really cool and catchy as always, but for the future; push your vocals. you can do it and you know that.
i found your vocal melody a little too mono tone in a way. i think you have a great voice and instead of singing at the same volume or in the same note-area, really try to explore your voice. the song was really cool and catchy as always, but for the future; push your vocals. you can do it and you know that.
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Re: HLMmusic (new song "Clean with a Carelessness")
Dylan, is this song better vocally
I lack what you call a willingness to dissolve all that is wrong with me
I talk to myself about running through hell to get where I'll never be
And I can't explain why the tears fall like rain and always leave a stain
But I'm sure, it's got something to do with me
Is all that I see, when I lay my head down to sleep
Just wasting, into something I'd die to keep
I've been to a place, where reality is misplaced
I just wanna stay, and watch time get erased
Crossing the line between wrong and right and I'm stuck in the middle ground
I'm pacing again, over steps where I've been but my head's spinning all around
And I can't explain this headache I've made cause its cutting like a blade
But I'm sure, it's got something to do with me
Is all that I see, when I lay my head down to sleep
Just wasting, into something I'd die to keep
I've been to a place, where reality is misplaced
I just wanna stay, and watch time get erased
And now I'm stuck in rut and I'm under the gun
but I'm not going easily
Cause I've had enough or taking the brunt
From my own jealousy
Is all that I see, when I lay my head down to sleep
Just wasting, into something I'd die to keep
I've been to a place, where reality is misplaced
I just wanna stay, and watch time get erased
I just wanna stay, and watch time get erased
I just wanna stay, and watch time get erased
I lack what you call a willingness to dissolve all that is wrong with me
I talk to myself about running through hell to get where I'll never be
And I can't explain why the tears fall like rain and always leave a stain
But I'm sure, it's got something to do with me
Is all that I see, when I lay my head down to sleep
Just wasting, into something I'd die to keep
I've been to a place, where reality is misplaced
I just wanna stay, and watch time get erased
Crossing the line between wrong and right and I'm stuck in the middle ground
I'm pacing again, over steps where I've been but my head's spinning all around
And I can't explain this headache I've made cause its cutting like a blade
But I'm sure, it's got something to do with me
Is all that I see, when I lay my head down to sleep
Just wasting, into something I'd die to keep
I've been to a place, where reality is misplaced
I just wanna stay, and watch time get erased
And now I'm stuck in rut and I'm under the gun
but I'm not going easily
Cause I've had enough or taking the brunt
From my own jealousy
Is all that I see, when I lay my head down to sleep
Just wasting, into something I'd die to keep
I've been to a place, where reality is misplaced
I just wanna stay, and watch time get erased
I just wanna stay, and watch time get erased
I just wanna stay, and watch time get erased
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Re: HLMmusic (new song "Get Erased")
I love the new song! Especially the lyrics and your voice sounds really good too! :D