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Hi ... this is another short song I wrote not long ago ..

I Hate

I hate the way you're dressed
I hate you think you're so blessed
Don't try to give it your best
Just say goodbye to the rest

I hate you, don't you get it?
I just can't get rid of it
I hate you, stop all your lies
I hate you, say hello to my goodbyes

I hate you, stay away from me
I hate you, why can't you see?
I hate that you're so tempting
You make me feel so empty

I hate the way you're dressed
I hate you think you're blessed
Don't try to give it your best
Just say goodbye to the rest

I hate you, just leave me alone
I hate you, stop calling my phone
I know you're in denial
So don't press redial!

...............

suggestions?

The rhyming is so forced. It makes the song seem so... amateur.

too many "i hate", you should save the "i hate" parts for either the verses or the choruses. not both.

i dont hate this

Bass Cone wrote:The rhyming is so forced. It makes the song seem so... amateur.

2712 wrote:too many "i hate", you should save the "i hate" parts for either the verses or the choruses. not both.

I know .. i'm thinking of re-writing the whole song >> it really feels forced ..

I hate you, just leave me alone
I hate you, stop calling my phone
I know you're in denial
So don't press redial!

i liked this one haha

iemnaiz wrote:I hate you, just leave me alone
I hate you, stop calling my phone
I know you're in denial
So don't press redial!

i liked this one haha

Thanx