this is the most recent song i wrote. feel free to tell me what you think. thanks
"Loss of Affection"
Verse 1
Staring at the phone, wondering if you'll call
I can't help but ask if you still care at all
Are we best enemies or worst friends?
I know how you're feeling so don't try to pretend
Always on my mind, it's made me so jaded
I care too much, all other memories have faded
If I could hold you right now, I wouldn't let go
And it's these five words I need to know
Pre-chorus
Tell me "what are you feeling now?"
You came into my life and turned it around
I don't know what to think after,
I've gone through a thoughtful disaster
Chorus
The loss of affection, replaced with neglection
I know we're still talking, but it feels like we're drifting
Verse 2
Train of thought sees no dead-end
Paranoia is now my best friend
There were things I could've done differently
We should both agree when it comes to empathy
Time stands still but the clock keeps ticking
The puzzle's complete but the pieces are missing
One thing I see with my eyes open wide
The grass isn't always greener on the other side
(Pre-chorus)
(Chorus)
Bridge
The darkness is blinding, the silence is deafening
Compulsions escalating, obsessions aggravating
The emptiness is crowding, the yearning is burning
The beginning is ending, the ending is beginning
The answers are waiting, the questions remaining
(Pre-chorus)
(Chorus)
Loss of Affection
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Re: Loss of Affection
i love those lines! :Dsprinks41 wrote: Time stands still but the clock keeps ticking
The puzzle's complete but the pieces are missing
"The missing part of me that grows around me like a cage..."
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thank you :D everyone i've shown this to so far has said the same thing. those 2 lines keep standing out to pplNoReason27 wrote:i love those lines! :Dsprinks41 wrote: Time stands still but the clock keeps ticking
The puzzle's complete but the pieces are missing
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Dude those are pretty amazing lyrics!
Well done, my man 8)
Well done, my man 8)
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thank you very much :DHentaiman wrote:Dude those are pretty amazing lyrics!
Well done, my man 8)