Last Goodbye

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Last Goodbye

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I've not been writing for a while but the other day I thought I would put pen to paper again, first song in 4 months.

Last Goodbye

When I look back at the times we had
At the memories, the good and bad
I promise to you I’ll always be here
So there’s no need to fear
Cause babe, trust me when I say
Anybody hurts you and they’re gonna pay

Remember what I do
Cause I do it for you

Until the day I die
I’ll leave my heart with you
This is my last goodbye
Until the day I die
Until the day
I die

Don’t look back, death is after me
Unlock my heart, you’ve got the key
It’s my choice to win you back
My heart has no need to crack
Cause babe, trust me when I say
I’m going nowhere, is that okay?

Remember what I do
Cause I do it for you

Until the day I die
I’ll leave my heart with you
This is my last goodbye
Until the day I die
Until the day
I die

You can’t stop me
You won’t stop me
There’s no stopping me
I’m here to stay

Until the day I die
I’ll leave my heart with you
This is my last goodbye
Until the day I die
Until the day
I die

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I would very much like feedback, negative feedback welcomed,

Cheers for looking
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Good job man
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Post by Ken »

The first lines of the chorus seem almost identical to that of "Until the Day I Die" by Story of the Year.

"Until the day I die
I'll spill my heart for you for you"

and

"Until the day I die
I’ll leave my heart with you "


Otherwise, its a good song.
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Post by Boni »

Ken wrote:The first lines of the chorus seem almost identical to that of "Until the Day I Die" by Story of the Year.

"Until the day I die
I'll spill my heart for you for you"

and

"Until the day I die
I’ll leave my heart with you "


Otherwise, its a good song.
I never noticed that,
I'll see if anything will fit better,

Cheers for that, don't want to get sued
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Post by LTS »

it's pretty awesome
One of a Kind of Something
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