How to Beat the System

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How to Beat the System

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this is one of a few songs I've written so I just wanna what people think. this is kind of a first draft and it's short and a lot of it will probably end up being changed. can you also tell me what you think the song means/is about?

when singing the lyrics the inyrp is slower and the parentheses are echoed. the chorus kind of sounds like the chorus of down by blink 182 but I'm trying to change that so peole won't think I'm ripping it off. so anyway...

Intro

The only way to beat the system (beat the system)
You'll find it hard to do (find it hard to do)
You know that we can't help them (can't help them)
Unless they help us too (unless they help us too)

Chorus

They'll get by with their tricks and scandals
There's nothing that they can't handle
There's only one way to beat 'em
The only way to beat 'em is...

Verse 1

It was on this day I realized
that there's nothing they can do to save all of our lives
just a volcanoe of curruption awaiting it's erruption
it's erruption of lies
who'd of thought they'd even get this far?
But you know that

chorus x2

Bridge

An idea so well thought out
why could it not be carried out?
An idea so plain and simple
why did it have to messed up by people

They'll get by with their tricks and scandals
There's nothing that they can't handle
There's only one way to beat 'em

outro

You can't beat the system
You can't beat the system
You can't beat the system
You can't beat the system it's already broken


 
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I like the bridge. There is a rythm to it that I can hear in my head as I read it. The 2nd line in Verse 1 seems a bit long though.
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Sick song, i like that fist verse, and the chorus is pretty catchy,
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I like it
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So bad. So, so bad.
And I know I said I needed space,

but I know I can't be comfortable in my own skin.

So when I say I'm scared to be alone, you know I mean it,

I'm just not ready to leave my room.

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