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a few weeks ago, i had a veryyyy bad day. nothing went my way at all and i was soooo angry about a lot of stuff. i never get like that, so i started writing this about how i felt that day and how it affected me. if you've ever had a reallyyyy bad day, i'm sure you can relate to this song.

Verse 1
Another day where nothing goes your way
You've got nowhere to go and you don't wanna stay
No matter who you talk to no one is any help
Every second goes by you feel like you're in hell
The pain is unreal, this must be a dream
Everyone is silent but no one hears you scream

Chorus
The anger grows and all you feel is pain
It's the kind of anger you just can't explain
You wanna channel it but you don't know how
Hold on tight, it's gonna get worse now

Verse 2
Your fists are clenched and your eyes are glaring
Everybody runs but it's yourself that you're scaring
You're afraid of hurting yourself but it's just a superstition
Everything that happens is a fucking premonition
You unleash the anger and things around you start to crash
You don't know what's gonna happen or how long this will last

(Chorus)

Bridge
I wanna lye down to sleep and never wake up
Can't take the anger, I've had enough
My whole body is shaking and racing with adrenaline
I need to sort out my thoughts and kill the anger within
Every move forward sends me right back to the start
of picking up the pieces of another broken heart
My mind is spinning, my stomach is in knots
The questions remain but the answers have been lost
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a really good song, man
I've been feeling kinda like this for the past few days...
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BanZ0 wrote:a really good song, man
I've been feeling kinda like this for the past few days...
thank you! hope you feel better soon too!
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Post by Childish Gambino »

It's not bad, man. I just think the rhymes seem very forced, it looks like more of a poem than a song, it's hard to really find a rhythm here... keep working on it.
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Post by silverdolphin »

It's a good song, but I have to agree with Jordan, I just can't find the rhythm.
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Chrous is the best part!
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UltraKolby wrote:Chrous is the best part!
thank you!
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