Tell Me A Lie

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Tell Me A Lie

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Before anyone bashes me, I credit Sum 41 for the ideas in this piece.

Razor blades cut through my skin
I give up, you win
Tell me lies, say words, make me believe
Set me up to fall before you leave
Tear me, Rip me, break me apart
It’s what I deserve, I feel no remorse at all

If this isn’t a lie
Look me in the eye and tell me
You aren’t setting me up to bleed
Life you already haven’t planted the seed
Committed the crime, done the deed
Truth be told you’re weak

Why are lies inseparable
Like they’re glued shut
These walls don’t come down
We stay stuck
Tryin to escape our lonely rut
Eyes wide open, but the heart shut
Kind of hopeless, feeling useless
Restless to break free

Tell me, tell me, tell me
What do you see?
The blood stains on the carpet
Stop it, you’re full of shit
Go left, I’m goin right
This is our last right
Cold feed from stage fright
Yeah that’s right, run away

Lie all you want
Deceiver, cheater
You aren’t cut to be a leader
Go away, I see it now
Burnt bridges, after the ashes it’s all in ruins
Quit cryin keep movin
Cheaters don’t stop
Even when they’re caught
Set this trail on fire
Drag me through the mud till we grow tired

Liar, liar
You don’t got guts
Finish what you started
Don’t stop till I’ve got cuts
Broken, bruised, numb, and empty hearted
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It shifts very much, if you could remember this whole piece of text with a full set of other songs, well then... you're cool :2cool4u:

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I like it ;)
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Lie all you want
Deceiver, cheater
You aren’t cut to be a leader

The only part i don't like, seems like you just put that for the rhyme.

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This is really good. I can see that Deryck has an influence on you :P

Edit: You said it yourself :D
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Pretty strong opening line you have there.
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BrandonCorey wrote:Pretty strong opening line you have there.

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lol thank you for feedback, yeah Deryck influenced me a lot in this, also kind of helped that i'm going through a rough time right now. =(
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