Roses Are Dead

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Roses Are Dead

Post by sprinks41 »

this is about my most recent ex

Verse 1
This was over before it started
Not far into it, I departed
You took hold of me and squeezed me to death
I couldn't breathe, that's why I left
Had to escape from your grips of obsession
I was unhappy, that's my confession

Chorus
Roses are dead, violets are new
Everything I said, went right over you
I cannot stay, don't like where I'm at
I'm walking away, and I'm not looking back

Verse 2
The writing was on the wall, but I was blind
All your questions, the answers I couldn't find
You drove me crazy, I knew it wouldn't last
Obsessed about our future, that's why you're in my past
Twisting my thoughts and raping my every word
I've said all I can say but there's not one thing you heard

(Chorus)

Bridge
I gave you my heart, you wanted my soul
You weren't happy unless you had control
We burned each other in dead flames
You sure know how to play games
See you around, we're not meant to be
It's for the best, that I can see
Lying to my heart, using my head for a call
I guess I'm better off alone after all

(Chorus)
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Wow, deep and really good. I like everything, only thing I can say is in the bridge... we burned each other in dead flames. It seems like there should be another syllable in that line and the next. For the second part you can say You sure know how to play mind games, but for the first part I'm not too sure. But hey it's your song. I like it though!!! :razz:
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I f#cking love the chorus. Keep it up!!
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dude this is AMAZING!
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thank you!
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Wow this is awesome! I really like the chorus.
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