This song is okay, but I have really shitty recording equipment and it's a tad repetetive. If you feel generous could I have some comments up on youtube?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=z8M8SZ0thhM
I have written a song.
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I have written a song.
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Re: I have written a song.
It's okay sounding. I'm sure it'd be better with lyrics, as you said, it is repetitive. The part with the phaser or whatever, in the verses, sounds choppy, like not a lot of flow. The ending was cool though.
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Re: I have written a song.
Yeah, it needs vocal melody, otherwise it's hard to comment anything about it..
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Yeah, it does sound choppy, I used the built in phaser effects on Mixcraft.
Vocals would make it better, I have lyrics, I just can't sing. That long repetetetive verse would sound so much better with vocals. But I mean, it came out better than I expected anyways.
Vocals would make it better, I have lyrics, I just can't sing. That long repetetetive verse would sound so much better with vocals. But I mean, it came out better than I expected anyways.
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Re: I have written a song.
Add vocals. They change everything. and who cares if you think your voice sucks, practice makes perfect doesn't it? It will at least give us an idea of how you want it to sound like when it's more or less completed.
This.Jeremy Kill wrote:The part with the phaser or whatever, in the verses, sounds choppy, like not a lot of flow. The ending was cool though.
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ya bro release with vocals, i thought it sounded pretty good