Fools In The Crowd

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Fools In The Crowd

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i was picked on a lot throughout my life, by both my peers and bullies. i'm 22 now (soon to be 23) and i wrote this song recently. it basically talks about how i was picked on, how it affected me, and how it affects me now.

Intro
With my back against the wall
It's me against them all
Keeping me awake at night
Can't they see, I don't wanna fight

Verse 1
A nightmare that never ends
Lost what I thought were friends
Pushed from all around
My screams don't make a sound
Hidden by careless eyes
Torture fuels my cries

Pre-Chorus
I'm still waiting for the answer
to the 4 words in question

Chorus
What made you better?
What made you proud?
You failed to see that you were the fools in the crowd
You were the weak
You were the joke
So many times I wished it was you into tears I broke
I felt sorry for you

Verse 2
Getting words and getting hit
I always kept it quiet
No one saw through the silence
My desperate burning of violence
Building tension trapped and running on overload
Push passed the limits and in your face it will explode

(Pre-Chorus)
(Chorus)

Bridge
I'm nothing like I was before
You wouldn't even recognize me anymore
If you saw me today
I'm new in every way
Been punched, kicked, and over to fall
And look at me now I'm still standing tall
Doing things I never thought I'd do
I'm stronger now 'cause of all I've been through

(Chorus)

Verse 3
Feeling no disgrace
They kick me in the face
I wanted to make them pay
For what I suffered day after day
Endless pain they'd bring
'Til I took a swing
Just for looks is so pathetic
Even to this day I just don't get it

(Chorus)
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Re: Fools In The Crowd

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not going to lie i think your intro is epic. chorus also pretty good. your second and third verse are pretty much the same but thats just how i see it. but overal pretty sick
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spaanzer wrote:not going to lie i think your intro is epic. chorus also pretty good. your second and third verse are pretty much the same but thats just how i see it. but overal pretty sick
Are you Deryck Whibley?
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Re: Fools In The Crowd

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spaanzer wrote:not going to lie i think your intro is epic. chorus also pretty good. your second and third verse are pretty much the same but thats just how i see it. but overal pretty sick
thank you =)
Jake-41 wrote:
spaanzer wrote:not going to lie i think your intro is epic. chorus also pretty good. your second and third verse are pretty much the same but thats just how i see it. but overal pretty sick
Are you Deryck Whibley?
hahaha!
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