my lastest lyric (No TItle)..tht's wy i'm asking fr ur help!

[nendhenvious]

I'v just made a poem, but i'v change it into a song cz i got some tones. But, i hv no idea wat shld i named it! Help me! Here y'go!

"I know that my life is bleak
Find another life to live
Another conspiracy to breathe
or stay with these apocalyps and crumbled by minutes

I've seen the universe by the dark side of demons eyes
So black and plain
Tasted like night and pain

Chorus:
But, darkness of the night, you're the only hope where i can see stars and moon light
I don't need sun, i don't need heat
I don't need fire, coz im blinded
It's only darkness that I needed

I know my mind is weak
You don't have to tell me coz you're just fake
My failure is my destination
When i'm fail i'v just fell

I've seen this problem by the darkest side of God's fate
You don't have to advice me! What the hell!

*chorus

Hail life! Hail fate! HAil conspiracy! HAil HAIL!
This's so asphyxiating and WHAT THE HELL!
HAil life! Hail fate! HAil conspiracy! Hail HAIL!"

you can add comment too! Or edit some of those words! thx fr help at least read it! -nendhenvious-

[Slither]

Does it fit on the music itself?

[nendhenvious]

certainly sir!
I hvnt rcrdd it yet.
Sounds lil' bit metal, hmmm... maybe hardcr punk, smthng sounds like bad religion married with sex pistols.
The "hail" lines are screamo part.

[Slither]

You be doin' them screams?

[nendhenvious]

yea...my vocalist doin' bad at scream.. so i'm the rythm gtr + screamo vocal... wat? is tht bad?

[Slither]

I don't think I ever heard a girl scream. At least, not in music.

[Pedro]

Seven Used Condoms.

[nendhenvious]

@slither. ahahaha! yearh! girls screamo is rare. But more emotional and sharp to the ears. Ahaha! I'v recordd it and it sounds not so bad.

[Pedro]

@slither. ahahaha! yearh! girls screamo is rare. But more emotional and sharp to the ears. Ahaha! I'v recordd it and it sounds not so bad.

http://www.myspace.com/rolotomassi

[Aaron]

title maybe, All That I Needed.

[Slither]

@slither. ahahaha! yearh! girls screamo is rare. But more emotional and sharp to the ears. Ahaha! I'v recordd it and it sounds not so bad.

http://www.myspace.com/rolotomassi

Jesus Christ, that's horrible. I don't even like male screamo, this is even worse!

[Hentaiman]

Haha, if you wanna hear some real girl screaming, try this band, its called M.E.S.S:
www.myspace.com/mrerrorsoundsystem

This band is so fucked up XD
But you gotta hear those screamings, its scary hahaha.

[Dylan]

what about "visions" by abnormality. all female vocals, i kid you not.

[nendhenvious]

I hvnt got any title yet!!!!!

[Pedro]

@slither. ahahaha! yearh! girls screamo is rare. But more emotional and sharp to the ears. Ahaha! I'v recordd it and it sounds not so bad.

http://www.myspace.com/rolotomassi

Jesus Christ, that's horrible. I don't even like male screamo, this is even worse!

Pussy ears.

[Boni]

I don't think I ever heard a girl scream. At least, not in music.

Have a listen to either Arch Enemy or Walls of Jerico

I suggest Arch Enemy, good band me thinks

Link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=n9AcG0glVu4
Either enjoy or not

[nendhenvious]

walls of jericho.. yearr.. "not so bad" band...

[Jeremy Kill]

Name it "The Hailski's"

[Bass Cone]

Name it "Typical Angsty Song #6071"

[turtlehobopirate]

Name it "Typical Angsty Song #6071"

Rofl nice.
I was thinking more "Teenage Poetry Made Into a Song"